First of all, I'm really surprised You, an English speaking man decided to come here and post this application. Not in a bad way, tho. Sadly, there are two major things You have to consider:
1. We're all on Polish speaking role-play organisation, as much in forums, as in-game. That's the main barrier, language one, as You may, or may have not guessed already.
2. Application doesn't meet our basic statute of minimum 800 words. Also, story itself is written poorly, considered our standards. Doesn't really tell much about the character, his thoughts, background, background of his parents and their story. For example: A lot of children in young age have imaginary friends they're talking to. Something more should have been said on this one, as it may be related to their culture, beliefs, to be caused by Force sensitivity of their child. How did father even get an idea, to look for a Jedi to help and train his son. It's very minimalistic, and that's not a good sign. In future, wherever it takes, You should consider going more indepth into Your ideas, stories and creations.
Taking into consideration both of this points, I have to say:
Anyway - I'm curious how did You get an idea to post Your application, as everything here is written in Polish. I'm not really sure, if there is some English speaking community of Star Wars roleplayers, if that's You're looking for. I'm pretty sure there is, as it's a huge world, but I personaly don't know.
Good luck to You, fellow Star Wars fan! ;)